PERIOD______
You are
now the editor. Your sample has been logged in for your homework grade. You
will be reviewing and editing the writing of someone else in one of the periods
of computer class.
Here are your tasks for
today. We may not get them all finished today.
1. Review the writing sample. If the
item requested is present (you can see it), write the indicated number of
points in the “?” column. (on back)
2. Complete all of the comments
sections. (on back)
3. You are to revise, edit and
eliminate any extra words that don’t help introduce the author to the
public.
a. THIRD PERSON - If they have used
“I” statements, revise the sections to reflect third person (as if
you were now introducing the person or writing the About the Author section
yourself).
b. EDIT– if you think you have
different way to say the same thing, try it out. Rewrite, look for any spelling
or grammar mistakes. Please , do not MARK on the original paper.
c.
ELIMINATE
– Take out any phrases, or words that don’t help introduce the
author. Be sure not to change the intention or the feeling of the introduction
or change facts. For instance, “Now I am going to tell you
about…”, “Next, I am going to say”. Any of these types
of phrases need to be eliminated and you will have to re-write the statement.
d. ANSWERING RATHER THAN WRITING
– If the person simply answered the questions (as if filling in a
worksheet), you will need to get out your creative hat to work on turning the
interview notes into an introduction.
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PTS
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DESCRIPTION
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1 |
Include
your name |
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2 |
Your
hobbies/interests (i.e. sports, reading, etc) |
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Computer
History |
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1 |
What you
know a lot about |
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1
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What you want to learn
about
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1 |
Type of
computers you have at home or have used in the past |
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4 |
Best school
experience has been (and why) |
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4 |
Worst
school experience (and why) |
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2 |
What you
hope to do this year |
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2 |
What you
want to do in the future. |
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2 |
Third
person (no “I” statements |
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20 |
TOTAL |
COMMENTS
ABOUT THE SAMPLE (things you would write if you were the evaluator –
remember to be kind, polite and respectful).
I would change (and explain why and what)_______________
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I really liked (and explain why and what)__________________
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Overall, I would suggest for next time____________________
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